rough cut feedback

Group S2-49:

For the Text messages at the start we think you should just show the text itself without the typing bit, but we think that the texting is still very significant to the sequence.

We also think that your soundtrack should build tension from beginning to end and make use of your scream within this. We think that you should include some diegetic sound effects for the hitting of the baseball bat on the mans hand.

The last point we would like to make is that maybe your sequence shouldn't be as revealing to the storyline as it is, create more mystery.

Josh, Fil and Lydia

S2-50 Feedback:
Really good shots of the texting, but maybe add effects to the texting in the soundtrack to build up suspense. Texting could be just the shots of the texts themselves instead of the writing of the texts.
Soundtrack needs to be apprehensive and build up a lot of tension, for the meeting of the two characters.

S2-51 feedback:
Narrative is clear and shown well. The chase section between grace and sam lacks continuity and a bit of fluidity. With more editing and possible jump cuts the tension could be built. The sequence could benefit from more shots of grace prior to the meet up and a possible point of view from the murderer. Also, a soundtrack which builds up slowly to the chase section will make the opening more suspenseful. BIG POINT, when grace is jumping over the ditch, you can see sam in the corner of the shot standing still.

S2-52 feedback:

When cutting to scene of 'hotman22' the sounds has different volumes each scene and it hurts the ears. Scream was well done, and very effective, When hotgirl ran away she just ran in a circle which didn't make much sense. The spelling error made by hotguy which was corrected took away took away some of his menace.

S2-53 feedback:

sound needs sorting out, unrealistic chase sequence, scream sound needs sorting out, good use of editing, mise-en-scene doesn't work out that well, location was good , edit stream jump abit more u can still see sam, sam needs to play the part abit more. Yuu need 2 keep ur hand still when its on the floor